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All the Words - Page 04 by NastyLady All the Words - Page 04 by NastyLady
It's been quite a while, huh? I had this page drawn... well, I think a month ago. I just couldn't scan it. But now, it's finally done, yes.
I think this one can actually explain some things... not much but still.

As you can see, I played a bit with shading this time (torches and candles, I hate youuuuuuuu), but I'm not sure if I should stick with it. Probably not.

One little advice - don't ever try to listen to music when writing speech bubbles. Or vice versa. IMPOSSIBRU.

Fun Fact #02 - This page is actually two combined into one. That's how much I want to kick Octy and V out of this damn castle.

Anyways, enjoy.

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:iconsemisecret:
The first panel, while interesting, is also slightly off-putting. The conversation is spread out well, though there is at least one spelling error ("...hiding behind the *elements*"- 8) and the negative space around the text itself is too blank. adding a tapestry to fill the blank space overlapping behind the speech bubbles would improve the visual. Size contrast between Luna and Octavia/Vinyl is also strange.

The last panel is composed very well. I suggest using the yellow tints more in future scenes with lamps in general. As shown here, the tapestries in the background show the kind of contrast I was talking about in my first paragraph. Leaving too much negative space can make a scene appear bland and colorless, which is undesirable for a comic with this kind of general feel about it.

First critique I've ever done, sorry if I wasn't helpful enough.
-Semi
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:iconluna-ticscientist:
Good to see this one back!
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#Your art is excellent, with only a couple of odd looking panels in the four pages - mainly where you've drawn ponies face on (the Luna on page 3, bottom right is the one that looks the strangest to my eyes). The 'sick Celestia' is very good.
#The one real problem is the text, especially in pages 3&4. These comics just beg to be printed into a book; at that size I'd have to print in A3 to stand any chance of reading it.
#You also might want to get a proof reader; there are a fair number of odd phrases and grammatical errors.

For example:
"When we realized that something bad is happening in Equestria, the sister of mine decided to take it in her own hooves."

Would be better as:
"When we realized that something bad was happening in Equestria, that sister of mine decided to take it in her own hooves."
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:iconoswann:
oswann Featured By Owner May 3, 2015
Idiots celestia you can't do all by yourself you need assistance with Luna 
that is best subject to do together! CELESTIA don't ever do everything stupid!😡 bad horse!
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:iconluvluvdarkness:
LuvLuvDarkness Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
"Everything went complicated" should be "everything went wrong" or "It's complicated."
But the artwork is great...
GAHH THAT LAST PANEL.
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:icongordon-weedman:
Gordon-Weedman Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2015
So dude, when are you gonna continue work on this eh?
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:iconnastylady:
NastyLady Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Probably never.
I got bored.
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:iconsaddust:
Saddust Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015
Too bad...
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:iconcobeoe:
cobeoe Featured By Owner May 28, 2015
video for you help if you can www.youtube.com/watch?v=WuZeC9…
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:iconsaddust:
Saddust Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2014
Please, a li'l update ? It has been two years...
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:iconcaelusstorm:
CaelusStorm Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014  Hobbyist
Oh my, is that a broken wing?  Oh, ow, that hurts.
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:iconsaddust:
Saddust Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
Luna's face (3rd panel) and Celestia are so well done. I don't know if you plan to post more of this, but sincerely it would be a very good thing.
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:iconluis-gah:
luis-GAH Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Professional General Artist
why Vinyl nd Octi?…
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:iconvzara:
vzara Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
=) when is next?
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:iconcrealaillia:
CreaLaillia Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my... i am really curios whats going on...
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:iconlonelynightrain:
lonelynightrain Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness.
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:iconapple-tank:
Apple-Tank Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Artist
What medium is this in?
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:iconnastylady:
NastyLady Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The lines are traditional. I drew it with a pencil to be exact. The coloring is done in Corel Painter.
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:iconyour-good-at-art:
your-good-at-art Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student General Artist
you should tottaly finish this, its gorgeous!
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:iconcobeoe:
cobeoe Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
no more for this story
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:iconthethirdmoon36:
TheThirdMoon36 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Digital Artist
"Sweet mother of dubstep"
XD
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:iconkirbykirby56:
kirbykirby56 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
lol just saying she actually says "sweetest mother of dubstep" but what i'm wondering is, who IS the mother of dubstep :L
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:icongypsywriter14:
Gypsywriter14 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely gorgeous! I love the rough edges :)
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:icongameguy199:
gameguy199 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Student Writer
will there ever be more?
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:iconvalorangel:
ValorAngel Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
This is so wonderful.
Please, continue ^^
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:iconfirehawk421:
FireHawk421 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Woah, is there more? If so when? This is good. Real good.
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:iconnothing111111:
nothing111111 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
When i've seen the last panel i was standing.
I fell. On my knees.
NO image EVER hit me that hard. EVER.
Also, "Sweet mother of dubstep" made me laugh so much (Mother of god :iconmother-of-godplz: for those who don't get it) that this quick change from something horribly funny to horribly wrong, punched me so hard i fell like hell came from it's deepest and revealed itself to me
Seeing her mane colour vanish, her wings laying without strenght (seeing open wide wings is a sign of power or glory while laying without strenght is a sign of defeat for me) and her face, the struggle she fights right now, Nurse's face and the atmosphere itself in the room all of this had a monstreous impact.
Truly amazingly done, you've made me consider get back to drawing.
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:icongeriman:
Geriman Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
Will this ever continue? :)
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:iconamanska:
Amanska Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
poor prinsses ;w;
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:iconzakgeki:
Zakgeki Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
So awesome!
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:iconmiddaysolace:
MiddaySolace Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist
Hmmmm. Good comic. But the leading question on my mind is "Why contact two polar opposite musicians when there are mysterious ponies in strange gear and uttering strange toungs, dark magic afoot, and princess Cellestia incapacitated, in extreme pain, and possibly on the verge of death?" *INHALE*. So yeah.
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:iconnastylady:
NastyLady Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's sorta alternate universe sorta thingy. Everything you asked should clear up (at least a bit) in the next... page or two.
But first I gotta finish them.
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:iconfrostthearticfox:
FrostTheArticFox Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
thisissoawesomeiloveitandireallyloveyourcelestiadrawing.



Sweetest mother of dubstep xD
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:iconkillkatt:
KillKatt Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Too old Princess. That's why you hide behind the elements, because you are old.
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:iconzobeid:
Zobeid Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Very effective artwork... The exhausted nurses look exhausted. Celestia's grimace of pain made me wince. (I would have expected her mane and tail to go back to their "natural" solid pink color in this situation, though.)

Seeing Luna in profile with Vinyl and Octy made me wonder if she's still growing. She's standing almost double their height, which is a size I had associated only with Celestia.
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:iconnurgledisciple14:
nurgledisciple14 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013   Writer
Hmm, I'm getting a Dishonored feeling for some odd reason.
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:iconlulz0mg:
LuLz0MG Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
SWEET MOTHER OF DUBSTEP!
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:iconvetje15:
vetje15 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
This is simply awesome. please continue
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:iconalliannah:
Alliannah Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What's happen with Celestia? O.o
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:iconthejboy88:
Thejboy88 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I know this comic has that whole "dark story" thing going on, but even so, it's hard to see Celestia brought down like this.
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:iconnastylady:
NastyLady Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And perhaps the things aren't exactly what they seem...
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:iconthejboy88:
Thejboy88 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
You intrigue me. I look forward to finding out what you mean.
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:iconkaleidoscopeheavens:
KaleidoscopeHeavens Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's it. I'm following you.
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:iconstarfire808:
starfire808 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
what does it said I can't read it
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:iconkirbykirby56:
kirbykirby56 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
zoom in by clicking on the image
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:iconstarfire808:
starfire808 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student General Artist
ok thanks
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:iconbigmacintosh7:
bigmacintosh7 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
moar pls
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:iconvampirkaa:
Vampirkaa Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wspaniała praca, wspaniały komiks.
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:iconvernes:
vernes Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
Usually when I forget about a series, and I find it again I have the self inflicted joy of having many new episodes I can read in one go...
What is going on here!?
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:iconjapanesefish:
JapaneseFish Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
is this comic still alive?
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:iconaddywuzhere:
addywuzhere Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
looks awesome! When is the next one?
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:iconwillydd:
willyDD Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
man, what is happening to her?
(the shading and the candles are perfecly drawn!)
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:iconzamiziana:
Zamiziana Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
O M G... O_o I want the rest!!!!! ( So awesome! )
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