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All the Words - Page 04 by NastyLady All the Words - Page 04 by NastyLady
It's been quite a while, huh? I had this page drawn... well, I think a month ago. I just couldn't scan it. But now, it's finally done, yes.
I think this one can actually explain some things... not much but still.

As you can see, I played a bit with shading this time (torches and candles, I hate youuuuuuuu), but I'm not sure if I should stick with it. Probably not.

One little advice - don't ever try to listen to music when writing speech bubbles. Or vice versa. IMPOSSIBRU.

Fun Fact #02 - This page is actually two combined into one. That's how much I want to kick Octy and V out of this damn castle.

Anyways, enjoy.

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The first panel, while interesting, is also slightly off-putting. The conversation is spread out well, though there is at least one spelling error ("...hiding behind the *elements*"- 8) and the negative space around the text itself is too blank. adding a tapestry to fill the blank space overlapping behind the speech bubbles would improve the visual. Size contrast between Luna and Octavia/Vinyl is also strange.

The last panel is composed very well. I suggest using the yellow tints more in future scenes with lamps in general. As shown here, the tapestries in the background show the kind of contrast I was talking about in my first paragraph. Leaving too much negative space can make a scene appear bland and colorless, which is undesirable for a comic with this kind of general feel about it.

First critique I've ever done, sorry if I wasn't helpful enough.
-Semi
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Good to see this one back!
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#Your art is excellent, with only a couple of odd looking panels in the four pages - mainly where you've drawn ponies face on (the Luna on page 3, bottom right is the one that looks the strangest to my eyes). The 'sick Celestia' is very good.
#The one real problem is the text, especially in pages 3&4. These comics just beg to be printed into a book; at that size I'd have to print in A3 to stand any chance of reading it.
#You also might want to get a proof reader; there are a fair number of odd phrases and grammatical errors.

For example:
"When we realized that something bad is happening in Equestria, the sister of mine decided to take it in her own hooves."

Would be better as:
"When we realized that something bad was happening in Equestria, that sister of mine decided to take it in her own hooves."
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Saddust Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2014
Please, a li'l update ? It has been two years...
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CaelusStorm Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014  Hobbyist
Oh my, is that a broken wing?  Oh, ow, that hurts.
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Saddust Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
Luna's face (3rd panel) and Celestia are so well done. I don't know if you plan to post more of this, but sincerely it would be a very good thing.
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luis-GAH Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Professional General Artist
why Vinyl nd Octi?…
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vzara Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
=) when is next?
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CreaLaillia Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my... i am really curios whats going on...
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lonelynightrain Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness.
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Apple-Tank Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Artist
What medium is this in?
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NastyLady Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The lines are traditional. I drew it with a pencil to be exact. The coloring is done in Corel Painter.
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your-good-at-art Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student General Artist
you should tottaly finish this, its gorgeous!
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